Goodbye toys
No fox in socks,or green eggs and ham.No more little indians,or wigwams.Gone are tin Soldiers,and Batman capes.The end of mudpies,and rollerskates.No Kerplunk or Buckaroo.I will have no time, to spend...
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I really liked this piece. Having two boys myself this really hits home with me. I think you could clean it up by checking your punctuation, your capitalization, and use less statements.The only...
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This is very thoughtful. i like Eagle Bill's suggestion on those last few lines and think it could be broken up for more impact. Overall, a good write.
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Interesting influence of Dr. Seuss presenting itself, however, this piece seems to rely too heavily on that influence and does not fight hard enough to break away from daddy's grasp.
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I personally think the use of weapons has more impact myself,than designs by other men,the poem is meant to be at first, light and amusing especially to people who has read Dr suess,and also played...
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Ahh, ok. I got you know aupon readin your response and second re-read. This now takes on a whole differnt form, reminding me of the film:Toyswith Robin Williams.
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nice poem...i could really relate to all the goodbyes....liked how you said we grow up to actually perform these acts of violence...very true
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